On the whole it's quite short-but-sweet which is nice. However it's maybe so short that I feel it's not making the most sense. I think it's meant to imply that she is actually Adarkim, but then it goes on to say after this is implied that she is 'supportive towards the Avagnarian cause' but not what that cause is or why. Overall I don't really understand what Avagnar and Adarkim means and why it matters which she is.
As you realise there are grammar and spelling mistakes. There's quite a few so I don't know how best to go through them, mostly tense to do with 'was' and 'were'. Also it's 'Au Ra' not 'Au'ra'.
Keep it up!
As you realise there are grammar and spelling mistakes. There's quite a few so I don't know how best to go through them, mostly tense to do with 'was' and 'were'. Also it's 'Au Ra' not 'Au'ra'.
Keep it up!
